Sunday, August 26, 2012

55 Words - Fiction


Sakshat was standing on gate, screaming continuously.

His cry was so deeply loud that it can move mountains, pierce anyone’s heart apart.

His eyes were blood-red, tears were rolling down his soft cheeks, and he was devastated being there.

His dad was consoling him.

It was saddest day of his life, first day in school.


21 comments:

  1. Your first attempt came up very well... not something like an usual one...
    Sweet.
    simply loved it...

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    1. I am glad you liked it. Thanks a lot :)

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  2. First day in school is always memorable for me. Nice first attempt.

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    1. First things in life are always memorable. Thank you for liking :)

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  3. nice one ...my mother tells me how on my first day to school i clunged myself to the small iron gate entrance and interestingly,my mom left me there in the hands of the school guard and a teacher.i creid for the whole day.
    When i ask her today,"why you left me.did'nt you love me "
    She said,"had i brought you home ,you would have always deny going to school whenever you liked.Going to school daily needs discipline.You would have been a rotten boy then."
    nice one na ....

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    1. Yes. It was good for you, atleast you are not rotten boy now :D.
      Jokes apart, but true discipline is important in life.
      Thank you for reading :)

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  4. Nice attempt Anjali:) Keep writing:) Wish you many more:)

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    1. I am glad you liked it, Sir. Actually I am very much inspired by your F-55s. You write amazingly.
      Thank you for the appreciation. It means a lot .. :)

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  5. He he he :) I rememeber when I went to hostel it was the best day , I had so much fun , somehow I never cried going to school ..

    Bikram's

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    1. I always wanted to study in hostel. It was my childhood dream, but it never happened. I don't remember I cried on first day or not. I written this after seeing someone who was crying on his first day to school.

      Thank you for reading .. :)

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    1. Glad you found it interesting. Thank you. Welcome here and keep reading. :)

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  7. Saddest day of his life...till now :D
    I looooooooved this one!!

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    1. Welcome here! Thank you for loving it :)

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  8. Really cool..... Nice writing. I keep comings back to your posts two read them....

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    1. Thank you Santa for appreciating it and for your regular visits on my blog. Keep visiting :)

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  9. Hi friend, I'm hosting a contest on 55 Fiction. It would be very Interesting. I'll be very happy if you contribute your writing in this contest "Best 55 Fictionist Contest" you can share it to your friends and fellow bloggers... take care...

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  10. Aha, quite an anti-climax there....hehe...great.

    Following you now :)

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